"Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

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"Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Tue Aug 20, 2013 2:45 am

"Darkness is a kind of song
That sings itself to sleep
A deeper dream than the hours of light
Speaks softly to those with ears to hear
Leave us not, oh comforting twilight
But in your warm bosom let us rest
let us all rest

Till the sun is reborn
Over a new, brighter earth
till then, grant us rest
restore our worth."
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Re: "Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

Postby Peanut » Tue Aug 20, 2013 12:32 pm

Not a bad poem Zarn. I think you could split your first stanza into two though. You seem to have two different ideas being expressed there and it might help the piece to emphasize them both a little more by separating them.
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Re: "Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

Postby Banana Lobster » Tue Aug 20, 2013 5:46 pm

These are some great poems Zarn, I really like them. But I think you should put them-and any more you want to post-in just one thread.
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Re: "Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Tue Aug 20, 2013 8:06 pm

I have; it's called Cacaphony of Souls. No one reads it, so I put the poems here separately.
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Re: "Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

Postby Peanut » Tue Aug 20, 2013 9:12 pm

Zarn Ishtare wrote:I have; it's called Cacaphony of Souls. No one reads it, so I put the poems here separately.

I can verify this (the not reading part). Its a pretty epic thread though so you should check it out Banana Lobster if you haven't yet. It was like the original compilation of poetry thread on CAA (or at least the longest running). The rest sort of followed the rest of the writing thread tradition of posting a thread for individual works which is fine too.
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Re: "Darkness Is A Kind Of Song"

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Wed Aug 21, 2013 11:41 pm

I am rather proud of that thread, certainly.
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