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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 17, 2009 10:03 pm

It's great to be here. For the past few months, I've been emailing this story around to my friends; now that I joined this sight, it seems perfect to post it here. The chapters are only drafts for now. If there's anything I need to work on, please let me know.
Warning: There are some mentions of blood.




Title: The cross of the warriors

Characters:

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God"

Ikimaru Tarimi: Wanted Swordsman.

Ichigo Desuto: A teenage girl who's looking for her dad who abandoned her when she was younger.

Grandpa: Ichigo's loving grandfather who has problems with his hearing.

Grandma: Ichigo's kooky grandmother.


Chapter 1: The Meeting (part 1)

John 3:16 - For God so loved the world that He gave His only begotten Son that whosoever believeth in Him shall not perish but have everlasting life.

"At sundown!" proclaimed the governor of the Sukikaku village, "this man shall no longer live to see another village on fire!"
The crowd cheers. The man is chained to stakes not moving at all. His face is pale, wishing he didn't have to die such a humiliating death. " How in the world did I get here?" the man thought, "I remember as if it was yesterday..."
Ikimaru, a tall, shaggy-haired swordsman wearing a tanned jacket, dark blue shirt, tan pants, and worn shoes, just left a village that he set on fire. He always had a thing for destroying villages, especially with fire. "Man, I love my job." As he was walking down the path he saw another village down the path. "Yay! Another village means more things to kill and burn!" Little does he know what will happen to him when he infiltrates the village.
As Ikimaru walks down the path toward the entrance gate, two amateur guards see him and shout, "Halt! Show us your passport!"
"Wait, this is still Japan, why do I need a passport to go from one village to another?"
"This is the Sukikaku village! One of the most elite and spiffy villages in the whole nation! We don't let just any random stranger entire our expensively built gates!"
"Is that so? If it's a necessity to have such a small picture of me on my very person, then here's my passport."
Instantly, a flash of light passed before the chests of the guards. Then the guards fell dead with fresh blood on their chests in front of the "expensively built gate."
"I still wonder why people have guards for villages," Ikimaru commented while wiping his katana on the clothes of the dead bodies, "They're always the first ones to get killed before the army. Oh well, I guess there's no harm in slicing useless guards like these."
Before he even had the chance to breathe, another man appeared out of nowhere in front of Ikimaru.
"Hey who are you?" Holding on to his katana
"Oh don't worry, I'm not here to kill you," said the mysterious man.
"Oh really?"
"Yes, I'm here to give you this."
The man handed Ikimaru a mysterious piece of paper with writing on it.
"What is this?" Ikimaru asked curious as to what could this piece of paper be.
"It's a gospel tract."
"A.....what?"
"A gospel tract."
"What's that?"
"It's a little piece of paper that tells you the Good News."
".......What's 'Good News?'"
"Just read it, maybe you'll change your ways."
"Maybe, don't count on it."
"May God bless you."
"Um...you...too..."
The man left leaving Ikimaru dumbfounded holding the gospel tract in his hand.
"Hmm, ooh look a question....Do I think I'm a good person?....yeah....ooh a test this just gets better and better...yes I've lied.....yeah I've stolen stuff....I don't understand who this Jesus is, but I've definitely murdered people, two people just a few seconds ago...adultery? well I was kind of a pervert when I was young so yeah I've committed adultery....court room? well if I did get into one of those, I'd definitely be guilty...hmm, heaven sounds fun while hell sounds like a really horrible place where even I wouldn't even wanna step in it...uh-oh, wait...I've done all this killing, stealing, lying, and adultery, and I'm gonna go to hell?! .....Oh good, that's easy enough, just ask for forgiveness.."
Ikimaru got down and prayed that Jesus would forgive his sins and accepted Him as his Lord and Savior.
"Ok, now that I've done that, what do I do now?"
Then in front of him was black book with a ribbon sticking out of it. Ikimaru swiped it off the ground and studied the outside carefully.
"Holy.....Bible...," he slowly read,"hmm, that's weird, there's no author written on it, oh well, something for me to read as I get some tea......wow what happened to me?" Ikimaru shook his head as he placed the Bible in his secret jacket pocket while he tried to find a place to have some tea. Again, another surprise awaits Ikimaru as he goes deeper into the village.
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Postby Bumblebee » Sun Jan 18, 2009 8:45 pm

[color="White"]Omg this is good, continue please [/color]
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sun Jan 18, 2009 9:19 pm

Characters:

Ikimaru Tarimi: Wanted Swordsman. 18.

Ichigo Desuto: A teenager whose father abandoned her when she was younger.

Grandpa: Ichigo's deaf grandpa.

Grandma: Ichigo's grandma who makes really good tea.

Chapter 2: The Meeting (part 2)

Luk 6:31 "Treat others the same way you want them to treat you."

"So this is an elite village?" loud whispered Ikimaru as he looked around for a tea shop, "I thought elite villages would have millions of tea shops. So if this village is not elite for its tea, then what is it elite for?"
"For finding wanted swordsman like you! Ikimaru Tarimi!"
Ikimaru swung his body around to where the voice came from. A samurai leaning against a barrel was piercing Ikimaru with his stare.
"I finally found you! Now you shall die for what you have done to thousands of other villages!"
The samurai ran swiftly toward Ikimaru drawing his katana out of the sheath. In a flash, Ikimaru's katana sliced the samurai's in half. The halfed-blade fell on the ground as if it was a knife that a baby threw on the ground for no reason.
"I don't want to kill you."
"Yeah right, like you didn't want to kill all those innocent people in the other villages and set them on fire."
"I've changed."
"We'll see about that, you murderer! Come on out guys!"
"What?!"
Suddenly five other swordsmen appeared all around Ikimaru. Ikimaru looked around and held his sword.
"Back off! Don't make me set this village on fire!" warned Ikimaru
The swordsmen ignored his threat and jumped at Ikimaru all at once.
"Alright, you asked for it!"
Ikimaru started striking his katana on the sand around him with quick strokes creating a column of sand around him and the swordsmen to create confusion among the swordsmen.
"I can't see!"
"Me neither!"
"Let's get out of here, it's the only thing we can do."
As the swordsmen ran, they started bumping into things like walls, trees, even each other. After a bit of hard strokes in the sand, Ikimaru ran as fast as he could out of the scene.
"Hey where'd he go?"
"Spread out!"
The five swordsmen ran in different directions throughout the city, while bumping into a few things as they pursued blindly - in terms that they can't see and that they can't find a solid path to track Ikimaru.
In the meantime, Ikimaru rushed into a random building structure and hid behind a plant in the corner of the structure just in case if the swordsmen entered the structure. As he hid he took short silent breaths so that his breathing wouldn't be heard by anyone. Suddenly he heard a startling voice.
"Hey!" the voice said, "who are you, and why are you hiding behind that plant?"
Ikimaru looked at the source of the voice. A beautiful young girl with bright brown eyes, long black hair down to her shoulders, wearing a yellow kimono.
She repeated, "Did you hear me?"
"Uh, yes, I did"
"Then answer me!"
"Oh, well, uh, I'm hiding behind this plant because, uh....my name is......"
"Stop stuttering and answer me!"
"Fine, fine! my name is Ikimaru Tarimi......"
"Ok, go on."
".....and the reason why I was hiding behind the plant because I was being pursued by five swordsmen."
"What did you do to make them chase you?"
"Wait, do you know who I am?"
"Um, duh! You're Ikimaru Tarimi! You told me your name just a few seconds ago! Do you have a bad memory or something?"
"No, no, I meant do you know of my reputation?"
"I guess not, what is your rep around here?"
"Not only here, all over Japan from the top of Mount Fuji to the city of Tokyo to the outskirts. I am an infamous swordsman who burns down villages along with its inhabitants. I can kill you right now with one stroke of my sword and you wouldn't even hear my sword come out of my sheath. Does that ring a bell at all?"
"Oh, you're that guy! That guy on the wanted signs for, like, about 9,000,000,000 yen or something around that."
"Wow, if I'm worth that much, I should turn myself in for the reward money I deserve."
"Wow, you're greedy."
"Wow, I was just kidding. I'm not that stupid."
"So am I."
The two stared at each other for a moment, then another voice came from the back of the house, scratchy as if someone was choking on a musubi with the plastic still on.
"Hey Ichigo! Who's that you're talking to?"
"A friend, grandpa!"
"The end of a soap oprah?!"
"NO! A friend!"
"Ohhhhh! Can I meet him?"
"Sure! Just don't spit on him!"
"What?!"
"Just get over here!!"
"Okay!"
A short bald hunched-back man with a cane stepped into the room where the two were standing.
"Hi there! I'm Ichigo's grandpa! But you can just call me Grandpa! What's your name?"
Ikimaru was a bit concerned about yelling his name so that everyone in the village would know where he was, so he decided to just yell one of his aliases.
"RUMAKI MIRITA!"
"Nice to meet you, Rumaki! Grandma is in the back making tea! You're welcome to have as much as you like!!"
"Thank you, Grandpa!"
Ichigo led Ikimaru to the back kitchen filled with herbs and spices along with an enormous kettle of boiling water held by an old shriveled up lady.
"Hello, Ichigo! Who's your friend?" asked the old lady.
"Friend, tell her your name," Ichigo directed at Ikimaru
"Oh, I'm Rumaki Mirita."
"Good to meet you, Rumaki. Would you like to have some tea?"
"Yes ma'am."
"Alright, just have a seat, anywhere you like."
Ikimaru sat against a wall trying to get a little bit comfortable. He still remembered that the swordsmen were still searching for him so he kept his eyes and ears open.
"Here you go, Rumaki. It's a little hot, so you might need to blow it..."
Ikimaru breathed in his tea leaving the cup squeaky clean as if she didn't fill the cup with any tea.
"Would you like some more?"
"Yup."
She poured some tea into his cup while he pulled out the Bible he found on the ground.
"I wonder where I should start...." thought Ikimaru, "....seems pretty big...I'll just skim through it...that should be okay for now..."
Ikimaru skimmed through the first five books, then Joshua to Ruth. He seemed to be really deep into the Bible.
"Hey, 'Rumaki!'"
Ikimaru looked up, startled, seeing Ichigo standing right in front of him.
"Yes?"
"You've been sitting there for five hours reading that book, it's already night."
"Oh wow, I thought I was skimming."
"Apparently, skimming isn't your forte. I guess you're used to the sight of blood more than the sight of text."
"I see. Shouldn't you be in bed?"
"Nah, I normally take a walk around the village at this time. You wanna come?"
"Thanks for the offer, but I'm still in hiding."
"Oh yeah, I forgot. How about I give you a big hat and different clothes for you to wear?"
"That's fine by me."
"Oh and you probably don't want your katana on your side. That'll make you suspicious."
"My katana never leaves my side, even when I bathe or relieve myself, it's still beside me."
"Eeeww, let's just get you dressed."
Ichigo gave him a blue kimono, white pants, and a large hat for their walk.
"Lookin' good, Ikimaru."
"Thanks, these clothes fit perfectly."
"Let's go."
They started walking along the street, then around the village square, a bunch of fields for farming, gambling areas, even a few tea shops. A few times they encountered a person walking on the other side of the road. Some they had small talk with, some commented that the two looked like a "perfect couple."
Finally they got back to Ichigo's home.
"It's time for me to pack it in," Ichigo said.
"Me too," Ikimaru yawned as he walked in, "That was a long...OOF!"
Ichigo punched Ikimaru in the stomach.
"You can't come in here."
"Why..." Ikimaru gasped, "...not?"
"You could kill me," Ichigo smiled.
"Whatever, I'll just sleep on the roof."
"Good night."
Ichigo went inside and blew out all the candles while Ikimaru jumped on the roof laid down into a light sleep.
The next morning Ikimaru was woken by the yell of a masculine voice.
"HEY! YOU THERE! GET DOWN HERE, YOU'RE UNDER ARREST!"
Ikimaru was so startled he fell off the roof. After he stood up and wiped himself, he saw a man wearing a golden kimono surrounded by a familiar looking bunch of swordsmen.
"What am I arrested for?"
"YOU KNOW WHAT YOU'VE DONE, IKIMARU TARIMI!! GRAB HIM!"
Two swordsmen grabbed each arm and each leg, and then another set of swordsmen chained his wrists and ankles.
"IT'S TIME FOR JUSTICE TO BE SERVED!"
A few minutes later, Ikimaru was standing in the middle of a gated area in the village square chained to the four wooden stakes three arm lengths away from him. A crowd started to gather in all around him. People from all around came to see this event.

(continue below)
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sun Jan 18, 2009 9:20 pm

Then the man in the golden kimono proclaimed to the crowd, "At sundown! this man shall no longer live to see another village on fire!" The crowd cheered and yelled at Ikimaru many insults he couldn't hear. Ikimaru's face was hanging below his shoulders.
"How did this happen? It was like yesterday, I accepted Jesus as my Lord and Savior, and now I have to be punished for the sins I've commited in the past," Ikimaru muttered.
"But remember that you'll be with Me when you die," said a small still voice.
"Huh? Who was that? Oh well, at least I'll be in heaven when I die."
A swordsman was walking toward Ikimaru holding his katana high in the air.
"So Ikimaru, this is how you're gonna die. Out of all the ways you could've died, you've been destined to die like this," said the swordsman.
"My executioner, we're all destined to die."
"Indeed. Wise words from such a wicked man."
"I've changed my ways."
"I'm sorry, but it's too late for that now. It is an honor for me to be the one who will end your life."
Ikimaru heard the sound of footsteps getting ready to light the fireworks. He knew that sundown was near. The fireworks will broadcast his death.
But suddenly, one of the fireworks was lighted. Ssssssssssss- ka-boom!!! Peeeewwwwwwwwwwwwww! Boom!
The crowd scattered away from the village square! Explosions were happening around Ikimaru's location! Even the swordsman assigned as his executioner ran away screaming like a girl from the explosions. Ikimaru looked around his fenced area wondering what was going on. The next thing he knew, he felt his chains fall off his wrists and ankles. He turned around and saw a beautiful teenager wearing a yellow kimono!
"What are you doing here?"
"No time for questions, you need to get changed and get out of here!"
"Got it."
The two ran to Ichigo's home, got changed, packed their stuff, and fled from the Sukikaku village.
"Why'd you free me?" Ikimaru asked as he ran.
"Well, if you're a wanted swordsman and you're very skilled with your katana, then you should know about my father who abandoned me when I was younger."
"You're father? Wait, how could I know your father if I'm around the same age as you? The only thing I remember about my childhood was the training I did with my sensei who suddenly left without a reason."
"Don't you get it? Your sensei was my father!"
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Postby Bumblebee » Mon Jan 19, 2009 4:15 pm

wow, this is really good..escapes death ;)
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Mon Jan 19, 2009 7:30 pm

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God"

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian swordsman who used to be a very dangerous killer, but is now a bodyguard for a teenage girl.

Ichigo Desuto: A teenage girl who is on the search for her father.

Driveza "Choru" van Allday: A mysterious man with different colored hair, eyes, and skin.

Chapter 3: Search in the Capital

After a few days of running, the two travellers rested in the village they were nearest to, Kaioru. It was a small village, with only a few swordsman. When the two entered the village, they decided to find a tea shop to refresh themselves from a long run.
"Welcome!" said one of the employees, "sit anywhere you like."
Ikimaru fell in his chair while Ichigo moved her seat back, sat down, and scooted the chair up to the table. After the waiter took their orders, they discussed what they were going to do next.
"I think we should just stay here until we've fully rested," suggested Ichigo.
"Alright, but how long will that take?" asked Ikimaru.
"About 3-4 days."
"Does it really take you that long to fully rest?"
"Well after running for a few days, yeah, what about you?"
"Only one."
"Well, Sorr-eee I'm not a renegade swordsman who has to run from the authorities all the time."
"Okay, let's just calm down, and have some tea."
The waiter brought them their tea and left the table. Now, Ikimaru starts skimming through his Bible as slowly drinks his tea. Ichigo just looks at him reading.
A few minutes later, she asked, "So whatcha reading?"
"John 8"
"um....ok.....what's it about?"
"Religious punks trying to trick Jesus by bringing in a woman who was caught in the very act of adultery and question Him what should they do so that they have a reason to arrest Him and kill him."
"oh...why did they want to trick, arrest, and kill Jesus?"
"Because - and I'm paraphrasing here - they don't like him teaching in the Jewish temple because that was their jobs."
"But why question about adultery when they can just.....never mind....let's discuss what we're gonna do next."
"Alright," Ikimaru closed his book, "I think we should ask the people in the village where your father could've ran off to."
"Sounds good to me."
Afte they paid their bill, the two travellers started asking the villagers where they could find Ichigo's father, going up to every person they saw and asked of the whereabouts of Ichigo's father.
Unfortunately, nobody in the village could tell them. Ikimaru and Ichigo started walking to an inn to rest. As the walked, they continued discussing what they should do tomorrow.
"It seems like you've already rested yourself," commented Ikimaru.
"I guess so."
"This probably means we should get back on the road before people figure out who I am."
"Yeah, but let's rest for the night to build our strength."
After that last quote, they entered the inn, got their rooms and packed it in for the night.
Suddenly, at midnight, a group of 3 rowdy thugs invaded the inn knocking over stuff, stealing money, and the like. The guards were powerless against the thugs' brutal strength and their giant machetes. They started going into each room killing the people sleeping inside.
When they got to Ikimaru's room, one of thugs was about to cut Ikimaru in half when Ikimaru suddenly leaped up on his bed with sword in hand. Before any of the thugs could move, Ikimaru's katana released of flash of light across the air knocking the machetes out of their hands. The thugs started trembling in fear.
"W-w-who a-are you?" they stuttered.
"Looks like you don't recognize me. Let me jog your memory."
Ikimaru sliced the air with his katana so swiftly that it caught on fire. The light from the fire revealed his face to the thugs. They then realized who he was and started shaking til they were on the ground covering their faces with their hands. Ikimaru pointed his katana at the thugs and said with an authoritative tone, "It seems to me that you've been on a killing spree in this village. Am I correct?"
At first the thugs were trembling; one of the thugs had enough courage to stand up, still covering his face, stuttering, "Y-yes, we have."
"I see. Another question: Do you know the location of a samurai named Mujin Desuto? Answer me!"
"Y-y-yess...we saw him w-walking toward the capital..."
"And do you know what his was going to do there?"
"N-n-no sir, w-w-w-we just saw him pass by us..."
"Alright, I'm satisfied. But now I have a request for you three."
"Y-y-yes?"
"Stop the killing and go on your way. Change your ways, just as I have."
"H-h-how did you change your ways? You still look the same to us."
"True, but if I hadn't changed my ways, you'd all be dead by now."
The thugs were now laying on the floor trembling. Ikimaru had to hold back his laughter because of how ridiculous they looked.
He smiled and said, "Alright, alright, get up. Just lead me to the capital, and you can be on your way."
The thugs slowly got to their knees, then one leg, and the other, still shaking in their clogs. While they were still trying to regain their normal posture, Ikimaru woke up Ichigo and told her about what happened and that they're going to the capital to find her father.
"The capital!" exclaimed Ichigo, "Isn't that a little far?"
"Well if I carry you, would you go?" asked Ikimaru.
"Um, okay....PIGGY BACK RIDE!!"
"What?....OOF!"
Ichigo jumped on to Ikimaru's back and was holding on to him like a baby koala to its mama. Ikimaru had to push her up a few times so that he would get a good grip on her ankles.
"You're blessed that I'm stronger than an ox."
"It was your idea."
"....true..."
With that remark, Ikimaru carried Ichigo while he followed the three thugs toward the capital. He wasn't really worried that the thugs would attack him with Ichigo on his back because he had enough training to fight giant enemies while carrying twice his weight on his back. Ichigo was only 20 pounds less than Ikimaru. Enough about weight let's get back to the story.
At noon, the five travellers arrived at the capital of Japan. The thugs then turned around to Ikimaru and did a formal bow to him saying, "It was an honor to be your guide to the capital, Tarimi-san."
"It was an honor to have you as guides, my friends."
The travellers said their goodbyes and went their separate paths...well actually Ikimaru and Ichigo were standing in front of the gate, and the thugs left. When the thugs could no longer be seen, Ichigo got of Ikimaru's back and stood on her own two feet.
"That was fun!"
"It sure was! I'm probably stronger now!"
"Cool!"
As they entered the gate, a strange man was running toward them. "Somebody help me!!!" Behind him were the authorities with swords in hands. Ikimaru and Ichigo stepped off the path so the pursuers and the pursued were able to pass by them. After the trail of dust was gone, Ichigo and Ikimaru were looking at each other. Looked back. Then puzzled at each other. Then Ikimaru realized that the could possibly help them find Ichigo's father.
After that sudden epiphany, Ikimaru disappeared leaving a trail of wind behind him.
"Wow...that guy sure is fast."
The man was almost getting cut by the swords of the chasing samurai when a blurry figure grabbed the man and disappeared. The samurai were confused and talked amongst each other about what had happened.
"Ahhhhh!!!!!!!!"
"Shh! Quiet man!"
"Zorry."
Ikimaru was flying through the forest until he ran out of trees. With his intincts he landed on his two feet with the man in his arm. He laid the man on the ground still in shock of the recent events. Ichigo looked down at the man, observing his features.
He wasn't an oriental man at all. He red hair, blue eyes, white skin, and broader shoulders than Ikimaru's.
When the man caught his breath, he got up.
"Zhank you for rezcuing me."
"No problem, why were they chasing you anyway?"
"Becuz, I'm an eellegal eemmigrant."
"So?"
"Vell, I'm not just any eellegal eemmigrant, I'm Driveza van Allday, aka 'Choru', a European beeznessman!"
"So why are you even here?"
"To do beeziness by trade in herbz und spizes."
"One more question, have you heard of a man named Mujin Desuto?"
Choru put his chin on top his hand for a minute, then he snapped his fingers with remembrance.
"Ah, yez, I remember heem, I believe he iz in prison."
"Where's the prison?"
"Inside zhe forbidden palace, where exactly I don't know."
"Ok, that should be fine, thank you."
"No problem, oh! What iz your name?"
"Ikimaru Tarimi, and my comrade here is Ichigo Desuto."
"Nice to meet you two, did anyone tell you zhat you guyz make a great couple?"
"YES!" the two replied.
"Zee you later!"
"Cya, and thanks!"
Choru went somewhere else while the two comrades made their way to the forbidden palace which was the largest structure in all of Japan that was heavily guarded and no bathrooms were installed. As the two stood in front of the gate of the palace they looked at the grandure of it all. The red tiled roof, the wooden support beams, all the other wooden details, the open windows with no glass, ten samurai guarding the entrance. Two golden dragons facing each other as if they were about to have a fire breathing contest. The statues in awkward positions at the gate. Four gargoyles facing in the directions of the wind.
Ikimaru motioned to Ichigo to not go with him and stay in the capital until he gets her father out.
"I won't kill the samurai, I'll only scare them."
Ikimaru grabbed his sword and threw it out of it sheath across his body into his hand. Then he crouched with his blade on the right side of his head. Suddenly he swung his blade as fast as lightning while he bellowed, "WINDBLADE!" creating a gale of wind carrying the ten guards off the ground.
With that move properly executed, Ikimaru jumped over the gate and disappeared into the entrance of the forbidden palace.
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Mon Jan 19, 2009 7:31 pm

Forgot the verse:
Romans 5:8 - For God demonstrated His own love for us. In this while we were still sinners Christ died for us.
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:17 am

Title: The Cross of the Warriors

Chapter 4: The Captured Rescuer battles the Giant of Elements!

Characters:

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God" who sent His only begotten Son to die for us.

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian bodyguard who used to be a renegade swordsman.

Ichigo Desuto: A teenage girl in search of her father who abandoned her at a younger age.

Gasuke Kicho: A 10 foot tall giant known to harness the powers of the four unofficial elements: fire, water, earth, and air.

Gen 1:27 So God created man in his [own] image, in the image of God created he him; male and female created he them.

Ikimaru starts running through the dark, ominous hallways as he searches for Mujin Desuto. Turns left, turns right, double-back, climbs up, falls down, and the like. After going down a flight of stairs, he encounters a room that could contain the Taj Mahal. At the end there's a small doorway. Ikimaru looks to the left and to the right. He sees tiny holes in the walls that are able to shoot multiple arrows when triggered. Knowing this, Ikimaru grips his katana and jerks it out of its sheath releasing a gust of wind throughout the whole room. As the wind continues to move throughout the room, arrows fire rapidly across the room, the tips land on the tiled floor. Figures.
As Ikimaru sprints across the floor, the walls started to close in on him. He didn't worry, because after a few seconds he is racing through the other doorway before the walls even came close to where it was dangerous to be in the room.
After running through an elongated hallway, Ikimaru sees prison bars at the end of another room even bigger than the previous. He started searching through the whole cell for Mujin Desuto when a voice from behind startled him.
"I finally caught you!"
Ikimaru swiveled around to see a dark figure facing him. His characteristics weren't distinguishable, but Ikimaru knew he was there.
"How could you catch me, if I'm not chained up?"
"Because you ran straight into my trap! Now you're gonna die a humiliating death!"
"What's this?!!"
Ikimaru held onto his sword positioning himself to where he could dodge any attack from any angle. But it was pointless because a loud roar shook the room with such force that Ikimaru fell on his bottom.
"Now, Ikimaru Tarimi! We shall see how powerful you truly are! That roar came from the legendary Gasuke Kicho, guardian of the forbidden temple!"
"Uh-oh!"
After a many earth-shaking footsteps, the 10-foot tall giant entered the room by breaking through one of the walls. He wore samurai armor along with a katana as long as Ikimaru's body. His eyes were squinted, his chin was long, his posture was that of a gorilla, his appearance like a hairless gorilla, his body overly-muscular, and his feet as big as Olympic swimming pools. Gasuke looked around his territory and saw the tiny Ikimaru standing in front of him.
"I shall leave your fray between this beast my good sir," said the dark figure.
When that was said, the two exits were blocked by two solid stone doors.
"Wow! You're pretty big!"
"And you're small like ant!"
"Well, let's get started."
Ikimaru pulled out his katana ready for combat. Gasuke pulled out his katana and held it in front of his body. The two bowed to each other and positioned into a fighting stance.
Suddenly Gasuke stabbed his katana into the wall and left it there! Gasuke smirked, clenched his fist, and punched the tiled floor creating a massive earthquake. Ikimaru jumped at Gasuke and landed right in front of him.
"I hear that you are legendary because you're able to control the elements. If this is true, then this should be an interesting match."
"If I hear legends true, you should be stubborn ant unlike other invaders."
Gasuke clapped his hands and created a gale of wind pushing back Ikimaru til his body slamed against the wall. Ikimaru got on his feet and just stood there as if Gasuke's attack didn't exist. Gasuke became angry.
"You no get up! Get down, ant!"
Gasuke rubbed his hands so fast that he created fire and curved his hands together to create a fireball. Ikimaru readied his katana in front of him. The giant hurled the fireball at Ikimaru with blinding speed. KA-BOOM!







When the smoke cleared, Ikimaru's katana transformed into a ginormous fireblade the size of Gasuke's katana! Ikimaru's eyes lit up and raised the fireblade over his head and pointed it at the ceiling.
"Thank you Lord for protecting me!"
Gasuke backed off from the presence of the fireblade. The very heat coming from the blade was suffocating him. But Gasuke was still maintaining his gorilla-like posture and pointed his katana at Ikimaru.
"Ant may have giant fire stick like mine, but he still ant!"
Gasuke started making circles with blade as fast as he could. When the speed of the blade was to his satifaction, he spat at his blade creating a vortex of water! The vortex shot at Ikimaru's katana trying to snuff out the fire. But Ikimaru was too quick for the vortex, so the vortex only hit the wall behind where he was previously standing.
Suddenly a ribbon of fire flashed near Gasuke's hand making him release his katana across the room. Gasuke yelped in pain. Ikimaru ran toward the sword, picked up a fairly big rock, and broke the katana in half. Gasuke was furious.
"Ant break Gasuke's sword! Gasuke squish ant!"
Gasuke lifted his leg and was about to crush Ikimaru right then and there. Ikimaru positioned his fireblade parallel to the ground, resisting the force from Gasuke's leg.
"Ant won't go squish!"
Gasuke put all this strength into the leg on Ikimaru's fireblade. Suddenly, his foot caught on fire! Gasuke started jumping around the room like a little girl bringing the room down to its knees. Ikimaru was aware that if he didn't get out of the room, he'd be crushed by the ceiling. But he still had a heart for the Giant of Elements, so slashed Gasuke's other leg to make him fall on his bottom. Then Ikimaru rushed behind Gasuke and with all his might kicked Gasuke up into the air, through the ceiling of the forbidden palace, and in front of that gates where the ten samurai were standing.
"Now that he's safe, I need to get out of here as well."
But he remembered that the only two exits were baracaded with heavy stones. The room was still crumbling. Giant rocksstarted falling through the tiled floor and into the depths of the unknown. The only way to get out of the room was to go through the giant hole in the ceiling.
"Aw man! I can't jump that high! I need something to get me closer to the hole."
He looked around and saw Gasuke's broken katana. An idea was forming in his mind.
"The hilt is still intact, I'll use it to launch me outta here."
Ikimaru sprinted toward the hilt and grabbed it. After he sheathed his own sword, he ran toward a giant rock tall enough for him to use the sheath to povault him through the hole. As he got to the tip of the rock, he jammed the hilt into the rock, and lifted himself off the rock and through the hole, and out of the forbiddent palace.
He landed behind the gate, jumped over it, and started searching for Gasuke.
Suddenly he felt someone jumping on him from behind! The moment he felt the warm thin arms behind his neck and the material from a yellow kimono, he realized it was Ichigo who jumped him.
"Heyy!"
"Hi, Ichigo. Sorry, your dad wasn't there, it was all a setup to kill me."
"I understand. I did some investigating while you were gone, and I found someone who told me of the possible location of my father."
"Cool, so where are we going now."
"We're going to..." Those were the last words before she was grabbed by Gasuke and took off. "HELP! HELP!"
"Oh no, this isn't going too well. Lord help me, please."
Ikimaru started running toward the giant when suddenly, he tripped over something and face planted into the ground. Everything blacked out!
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:20 am

Chapter 5: The Damsel in Distress rescued by the Knight in Yellow Armor

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Kami-sama: Japanese for "God" the Creator of everything we see, hear, taste, smell, touch and the like.

Ikimaru Tarimi: A renegade swordsman who converted to Christianity and is now a teenage girl's bodyguard.

Ichigo Desuto: A beautiful teenage girl who's looking for her father who abandoned her at a younger age.

Gasuke Kicho: The guardian of the fallen forbidden palace who is able to harness the four unofficial elements.

Luk 14:11 For everyone who exalts himself will be humbled, and he who humbles himself will be exalted."

Ikimaru found himself on a cruiseship. He looks around seeing what's around him. People! Since when was there a bunch of people around him? He started walking when suddenly, he fell off the ship and onto an island. When he gathered himself together, he started walking around to find out how to get out of here. Wherever "here" is anyway.
Unexpectedly, he saw a portal appear right in front of him. A figure came out of it. He was wearing bulky yellow armor that looked futuristic in a way. When the figure saw Ikimaru, he grabbed Ikimaru and shoved him into his armor. When Ikimaru was about to use his sword, the armor wearer disappeared.
"Huh? What just happened?"
Instantly another figure appeared out of a portal, this time he seemed dark and evil looking. Ikimaru felt great power from this figure so he started running away from the figure. Then somehow, Ikimaru made an obscure hand sign and made multiple clones of himself and scattered in different directions. The dark figure shot lasers out of his hands destroying all the clones. When he found Ikimaru, his laser grew bigger and aimed it at him.
"C'mon, how does this armor work?"
A small voice said to him, "Have faith."
"Hmm? Um....ok."
At that point, a portal suddenly opened in front him and he jumped in not knowing where it led to.
A few seconds later, Ikimaru woke up and saw Gasuke still walking out of the village holding Ichigo in his left hand. He wasted no time in running toward the big galute as he grabbed his sword with his left hand and leaped into the air. Unfortunately, instead of landing on Gasuke, he hit a tree.
"OOFFF!....Who put that tree there?"
"MEE!!!"
"How's that?"
"Remember? Gasuke controls elements! You still ant! Now die!!!"
Gasuke placed Ichigo in a tree and jumped high in the air ready to body slam Ikimaru.
"Uh-oh, now what?"
"Have faith," said a small still voice.
"Um....ok."
Suddenly Gasuke landed on Ikimaru without peer! Gasuke started chuckling for his victory over the "ant" and how he got squished by his tushy.
"No one can beat Gasu......owie! owie! owie owie!"
Gasuke started jumping up and rubbed his behind to relax the pain in it. When Ikimaru got up, his body shined like that of an angel! His katana was pointing up toward the sky. Then he realized that his whole body was covered in the bulky yellow armor he saw in his dream!
"Whoa, this is kinda trippy! I've never seen anything like this before."
After Gasuke finished rubbing his behind, he grabbed his sword and pointed it at the shiny Ikimaru. Ikimaru did the same at Gasuke, except for the rubbing his behind part. Gasuke swiftly threw his katana heading straight for Ikimaru. CLINK! But it bounced off Ikimaru's armor as if it was only a small rock. Both of them were amazed of such power coming from the armor.
"So if this armor can protect me from both Gasuke's squishing powers, and his katana, then I should have no problem doing this!!"
Ikimaru ran at full speed toward the Giant of Elements. Gasuke still had no idea what's going at the moment just remained a sitting duck. Ikimaru rammed his body into Gasuke's, and the giant flew sky high! Before he became a twinkle in the sky, he said his last words of remembrance.
"TEAM ROCKET'S BLASTING OFF AGAIN!!!"......twinkle.
Ikimaru smirked, and walked toward the tree where Ichigo was placed. With one hand, he shook the tree with great force until Ichigo fell out of the tree and onto Ikimaru's back.
"OOFFF!....."
"Hi again!"
"Sup."
"Ready to go?"
"Let me get up first."
"Oh, sorry."
"That's better. So where are we going now?"
"North!"
"Oh dear. Oh well, at least it won't take forty years like the journey I read in Exodus."
"In what?"
"I'll tell you along the way."
"Okay!"
So the two started their Trek through woods toward north where their next adventure will occur in some form or another.
"By the way, Ikimaru, what did Gasuke say before he disappeared?"
"'TEAM ROCKET'S BLASTING OFF AGAIN!!!', why?"
"Just wondering," Ichigo smiled.
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:26 am

Chapter 6: The Blind Encounter (part 1)

Characters:

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God", without Him we wouldn't be here

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian swordsman who's guards a teenage girl.

Ichigo Desuto: A teenage girl who's on the search for her dad who abandoned her.

Mewa Jouzu: A blind woman who has the talent to play a sitar and make lots of money.

Jhn 9:39 Jesus said, "For judgment I have come into this world, so that the blind will see and those who see will become blind."

Last time, Ikimaru was given the yellow armor he saw in a vision and knocked Gasuke, the Giant of Elements, sky high.
"TEAM ROCKET'S BLASTING OFF AGAIN!"
Now, Ikimaru and Ichigo are refreshing themselves from a long journey northward at a teashop in a small village called Giyu.
As things started getting boring, Ikimaru pulled out his Bible and continued reading it. Ichigo, out of curiousity, was looking over his shoulder getting small glimpses of what he was reading. The only words she managed to see was, "Spiritual Gifts." She shrugged and continued drinking her tea in peace.
Strangely, a man came running inside the teashop gasping for breath waving a flyer for everyone to see. After he gathered himself, he proclaimed, "My brothers and sisters! I'm hosting an eating contest for a prize of 100,000 yen for plot development!" Just before the last word escaped his mouth, everyone sprinted their way out of the teashop and toward the signup booth for the contest. The only people left were Ikimaru, Ichigo, and the man who just announced the contest.
"Aren't you two going to enter the contest?" asked the man.
"If this guy wants to...," Ichigo said unassuredly.
Dead silence filled the room. No one knew what to say.
After a few minutes, the silence was broken with the loud slap of the closing of the Bible.
"Sure, why not? I'm hungry anyway."
"Alrighty then!" Ichigo exclaimed. "What took you so long to answer?"
"I wasn't done with the chapter, and I wanted to retain what it said so I had to read slower than usual."
"Um...ok."
The two exited the teashop and signed up at the booth.
"But before you guys sit down, both of you need to pay something," the man said.
"How much?" Ikimaru asked.
"At least one yen."
".....I don't have any money...do you have any Ichigo?"
"Nope."
"Oh....well do you guys have anything that you could give me in place of money?"
Ichigo handed the man a pair of pink smooth chopsticks with chibi figures on them.
"This was a gift from my father."
Ikimaru gave him his katana.
"If I lose it, I lose it. If I win it back, I win it back."
Then the man escorted the two to their seats next to each other. Before he left he turned around and asked them, "Did anybody mention that you two make a good couple."
The two just stared at him....menacingly.
Ikimaru looked around and saw plenty of people from all over Japan.
Wow, this many people for plot development? thought Ikimaru. Oh well, at least I have an appetite for some food.
As he looked among the vast amount of people, he noticed one lady who seemed as if she couldn't see the broadside of a barn. Curiousity aroused, he walked up to her and said hello.
"Oh, hello."
"What's your name?"
"Mewa. Mewa Jouzu. Your name?"
"Ikimaru Tarimi."
The lady's eyes widened from the sound of the name.
"What are you doing here?"
"um....to eat?"
"But why? This village doesn't deserve to be burned by your katana."
"First of all, I'm here because I'm really hungry. Second, I can't burn the village with my katana if I had pay the guy with my katana, so this village will be okay. Besides, I've changed."
"I see."
"You sure about that?"
"...ha ha very funny. I hear that you always have a thing for cracking lame jokes, especially jokes about lame people like me."
"You're not lame. You're legs seem fine to me."
Mewa sighed, "I'll talk to you after the contest."
"Alright."
Ikimaru went back to his seat and took out his Bible and read some more. Ichigo decided to look up at the sky, adoring the pretty clouds.
A few minutes later, the man from before started yelling at the contestants
"ALRIGHT! YOU GUYS HAVE SIGNED UP FOR JAPAN'S LARGEST EATING CONTEST! THE RULES ARE SIMPLE: EAT 'TIL YOU CAN'T EAT NO MORE! NOW THAT THAT'S SAID AND DONE! START EATING!"
That was sudden, Ikimaru thought as he ate through the first bowl of rice.
The portions served were bowls of rice with various types of meat inside the rice. Kinda like musubi except in a bowl and without the seaweed.
As Ikimaru scarfed through the fifth, he started thinking about how he was trained through eating massive portions of food.

Chibi Ikimaru carried a bamboo stick and tried defend himself from his masters swift attacks. He parried, but was too slow for the sudden blow to the stomach and fell on his back.
"Ikimaru, try not to be so stiff in your movements."
"Yes sensei."
"This is happening too much in your training. You need to let loose, and stay relaxed when your in combat, but not too relaxed where you can't block anything. Relaxed to where your mind not distracted, but crisp in every movement you make in the midst of combat."
"Yes sensei."
"In order to make you like what I've just said, you need a lot of energy. Even more than mine. So in order to give you excess amounts of energy to the 10,000 percentile, you need to eat plenty of food."
"But sensei, you said overeating will make one lose their samurai skills and hone the skills of a sumotori."
"I did say that, but now you're conditioned to the extent where you could eat til you gain 100 more pounds. The weird thing is that, you're skinny enough to never get fat after eating a lot."
"How do you know sensei?"
"I've seen you go to those teashops and run up the bill."
"The stalking technique sensei?"
"No, I just ask your parents on how you do on your training at home."
"But I train here 24/7, how could I go to my parents' home?"
".........this conversation was supposed to be for the sake of a flash back, but it didn't work....oh well, at least I managed to make the point about eating a lot of food."
"Sensei, what's a flashback?"
"You'll know when you're older."
"....like you told me about learning the Fireblade....when I get older....could you at least tell me what I need to do in order to summon the Fireblade?"
Sensei was caught off guard with that question, "..uh...um....welll......no. You can't. It requires more skills than you're learning right now in order to learn the Fireblade...."
"Oh...yes sensei."

I wonder how much food I ate when I was a kid, thought Ikimaru as he finished the twentieth bowl.
After that, only four people remained: Ikimaru, Ichigo, a sumotori, and Mewa.
After 40 bowls, the sumotori fell out of his chair.
After 96 bowls, Ichigo held her stomach and went off to the side.
Now it's Mewa against Ikimaru. 100 bowls, 110 bowls, 120 bowls, 150 bowls, 200 bowls.
CLAP!
Ikimaru's hands were clapped together admitting defeat. He couldn't go on.
"MEWA WINS!!"
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:27 am

The man runs up to Mewa and hands her everything that was paid at the booth, including Ikimaru's katana and Ichigo's chopsticks.
When Ichigo came back, and realized who won, she started crying.
"Ichigo, what's wrong?"
"You didn't win! Now my precious chopsticks are in the hands of a strange woman!"
"Don't worry, don't worry. You're supposed to take lightly the things of this earth, or so I've read."
"But you don't understand! That is the only thing I have to remember my father by!"
"Oh....still you're not supposed to devote your life to a pair of chopsticks."
Ichigo walked toward Mewa with a red face. Ikimaru didn't like the looks of situation, so he walked calmly toward where Mewa was sitting. Mewa was just sitting there not looking at Ichigo. Ichigo clenched her fist and started breathing hard and was about to punch Mewa before Ikimaru stood in front her and grasped Ichigo's fist.
"Just let it go. You'll be okay."
"OKAY? OKAY?! THIS BLIND PERSON JUST TOOK MY CHOPSTICKS!!!"
"Listen to yourself! You're mad over a pair of cruddy chopsticks! You need to cool down and just forget about it, okay?"
Ichigo's face returned to normal color, then she pouted not looking at Mewa. Ikimaru asked Mewa if she would forgive Ichigo and if there's anything they could do for her.
"I forgive you Ichigo and yes, there is something I'd like you to do for me. How would you guys like to accompany me on my travels?"
The started at her for a moment, then they whispered to each other for a bit about the sudden change in plans.
After they finished chatting in whispered tones Ikimaru said to Mewa, "Where are you going?"
"Honshu, why?"
"We were heading there as well, and we wanted to make sure that if we were going to accompany you, we'd all be heading the same direction."
"Ok, well, are you gonna tag along?"
"Yes."
"Yay! We can leave as soon as you guys are ready."
"We're ready."
"Yay!"
Ichigo butted in, "Um, may I have my chopsticks back?"
"Nope, and Ikimaru can't have his katana back."
Ichigo pouted again while Ikimaru just sighed.
Mewa led the two across wide fields, crowded villages, humid forests, over the river and through the woods. When they were in villages Mewa played her sitar for money. People wondered how a blind woman could ever be so talented on such a complex instrument with seven strings. This became a norm for the three travelers as they progressed toward Honshu.
After another successful performance, the three decided to celebrate with hot spring bathing, Mewa's treat of course. But first Ikimaru had to disguise himself so that nobody would recognize him. When nobody was looking, Ikimaru got a blind fold, ripped two holes on it for eyes, and tied it around his head. It's the perfect diguise! Or so he thought anyway.
When the three came in they went up to one of the employees, asked for a large room...for bathing and relaxing..., paid for the first hour, and they went down a long hall with a door open to the 500X500 m^2 room.
As the two ladies enjoyed their time in the springs, Ikimaru decided to look around and find something to do so that he won't have to be bored out of his skull. Unfortunately, there was nothing else to do that would be entertaining, unless if you count watching people come in and out of the door, watch employees do work, and listening to the occasional sounds of doors closing. The loner had to do something. He walked casually trying to keep his patience....then he remembered! His Bible! He hasn't read it for a while. When he found a bench and a bunch of bananas to snack on, he continued off in the book of James while snacking on a banana.
A few hours later, Ikimaru heard the sound of two familiar giggling voices getting louder and louder. He looked up and saw Ichigo and Mewa eating bananas in front of him. Ikimaru looked to his right where he placed his bananas and noticed that there were three bananas missing. He looked back at the ladies with an unemotional look. Was I that into my reading?
After the three left the hot springs place, they went to a nearby inn to rest for the night. While the ladies were sleeping, Ikimaru sat down in the moonlight, grabbed another banana, and continued his reading.
Tap, tap! Ikimaru felt a finger poking at his shoulder. With his peripheral vision, he saw Mewa in her pink kimono.
Ikimaru asked, "Couldn't sleep?"
"I need to talk to you."
"Shoots."
"In private."
The two went outside, Ikimaru still carrying his bananas.
"More private."
The woods.
"Is this good enough, Mewa?"
"I need to ask you something."
"Tell me."
"I want to be your ally. In swordfighting. Is that okay?"
"Why do you want to be my ally in swordfighting? Don't you need special training for that, since you're blind and stuff? Besides, you're good at the sitar, don't give that up."
"I am good at the sitar, thank you, but that's not my primary skill. It's acutally..." She unsheathed a sword, "swordswoman."
Ikimaru's amber eyes raised from the sound of the sword and the words behind it.
"I see. Then you know about my training history."
"Yes, Ikimaru. Otherwise known as Augustus."
"No need of formality, I already got that from a bunch of other people."
"Oh, but I must! You are from a royal line of Sensei-to-Seito training!"
"So?"
"So?! You're very name shows your elite level! You're the 8th and final remnant of the royal training from all the way back to when Ianuarius, the 1st was trained! This training isn't blood line, it's taught! But for some reason it's still called a royal line!"
Ikimaru sighed, this was getting nowhere.
"Mewa, you're a nice lady. But I can't accept your offer because my old self is gone. What see now is a new creation."
The blind lady's face was sad. She couldn't believe her ears. But for some odd reason, she was still smiling. Ikimaru just realized what kind of trouble he's in. That smile wasn't normal.
Suddenly, she ran toward Ikimaru with her katana. She aimed her blade straight at his chest. Instantly, Ikimaru grabbed a banana, peeled it, and blocked her attack with the peeled banana. TING!
The two slid back and stood in their own fighting stances. Ikimaru had to be careful with his banana 'cuz it was bruised at the unpeeled side. Mewa jumped in the air for more power and yelled "HEMOBLADE!" Ikimaru ran behind a tree dodging the hemoblade. When turned around to look, he saw Mewa's blade glowing blood-red. Just as he feared.
If I'm not carefull, I could easily die from blade contact.
Ikimaru breathed very softly so that he couldn't be heard. He tiptoed toward another tree, looked for Mewa. Didn't move. Tiptoed to another tree. Looked. Still there. Another. Looked. GONE!
Uh-oh!
He saw Mewa standing right in front of him, still smiling in a creepy manner. With hard force she swung her crimson blade at Ikimaru. Miss! Hit the tree. Swung again. CLING! Hit the banana. Ikimaru started running away. God help me!
"Let me be your ally, Augustus!!"
Stop calling me that!
Ikimaru was out of breath. He saw Mewa moving slowly in his general direction. He had no other choice but to destroy the hemoblade with one attack. Inhale. Exhale. Repeat.
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Mewa's head turned toward Ikimaru and ran full throttle at him. Her blade pointed straight at him. Ikimaru jumped. STAB! She hit the tree where Ikimaru was in front of only a few seconds ago. She jumped in the air spinning her blade. Ikimaru's banana stood no chance against a spinning hemoblade. As a branch was approaching him, he caught it and swung backward landing on a another branch. Mewa, also, landed on a branch. She swung her blade. BLOCK! Upper cut. Block! 360 spin. Block! Ikimaru attempted to hit her blade off her hand with his banana. MISS! She reacted quickly and raised her blade. Ikimaru retracted his hand. She may be blind but she can do a lot of damage with a sword, and she has quick reaction time to boot.
The lady pulled her blade back and stabbed the air creating a gust of wind pushing Ikimaru off his branch and delivering cuts all over his body before he had hard landing on the ground. Not very comfortable. Ikimaru was still breathing preparing for the one attack. He firmly gripped his banana. Ready!
Mewa jumped toward the ground facing toward Ikimaru with blade glowing crimson-red. Ikimaru stood up, holding tightly his banana. The lady raised her sword pointing it at the sky ready to deal the last blow. She swung downward. It hit the ground. She underestimated her distance from Ikimaru.
Suddenly, she heard the sound of buzzing in front of her along with the sound of many birds cheeping. Heat was also coming from the sound. The heat and the sound came from Ikimaru's banana. Immense power came from lightning produced from the banana. Ikimaru was focusing some of his strength on the banana. Trying to maintain it for a few seconds giving the banana time to develop full power. "LIGHTNING BLADE!!" Ikimaru lifted his banana just a smidgen and dealt a powerful blow at the hemoblade shattering it into billions of little tiny pieces leaving only the hilt held in Mewa's hand which was already trembling. She stepped back with wide eyes dumbfounded. She couldn't go on with just a hilt, from what she has heard from the lightning blade, there's no way she could win.
"I-I can't believe my hemoblade lost to a banana. I don't want to travel with you guys anymore."
She ran away from the scene leaving Ikimaru staring down at the shattered pieces of the hemoblade. Behind him was the sun rising.
When Ikimaru got back into the room, leaned against a wall and closed his eyes. SLAP! Ikimaru's cheek became red from the impact of Ichigo's hand across his face. Opening his eyes, he saw Ichigo in her yellow kimono with her things packed.
Ikimaru looked around the room. Mewa's things were still here along with Ichigo's chopsticks and his katana. He went up to the chopsticks and katana and packed them along with his own belongings. As he opened the door he heard Ichigo intentionally clear her throat.
"Oh, sorry. I forgot that these were yours."
He tossed the chopsticks to Ichigo. She caught it. The two of them left the inn and continued their trek toward Honshu where they'd hopefully find Ichigo's father.
"Hey Ikimaru,"
"Yeah?"
"Can I have that banana you're still holding?"
"Um..sure."
He tossed the banana at Ichigo. When she caught it, Ikimaru just remembered that he used the banana for the lightning blade. Before he could say anything, he heard her scream a bloody cry from the bite she took from the banana.
"Ikimaru! That's not nice!"
"Sorry, I forgot."
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:28 am

Chapter 7: The Blind Encounter (part 2)

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Kami-sama: Japanese for "God", who sent His only begotten son to die for us.

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian samurai who was formerly known as Augustus.

Ichigo Desuto: A teenage girl who's still searching for her father.

Mewa Jouzu: A blind lady obsessed with wanting to be Ikimaru's ally.

Psalm 51:1 - Be gracious to me, O God, according to your loving kindness. According to the greatness of your compassion blot out my transgressions.

We find the two travellers on their way to Honshu, where Ichigo's dad is said to be found. As they were walking along a wide dirt path, Ikimaru was contemplating the bout with Mewa, who's obsessed with fighting alongside him because of his ranking. So this is what having a fangirl's like....he shuddered as he continued thinking.
Mewa's blade turned crimson as she yelled "Hemoblade!" Wait a minute, where have I seen that before? Ikimaru goes back toward the day he became "Augustus" at his training temple Mujin Desuto holds in his hands a katana and a wakizashi in front of the kneeling Ikimaru. "I'm so proud of you my student. You have achieved one of the highest ranks of samurai at a young age. This is a first, indeed." As Mujin gives Ikimaru the two swords as he says, "I, Mujin Desuto, Julius samurai, hand you Ikimaru Tarimi, the Augustus swords which'll allow you to harness your element of the Shadows." Ikimaru slowly took the swords. Placed the katana on his right hip, and the wakizashi in jacket. When looked up at Mujin, he smirked and disappeared. All the people at the temple were looking all around from where they were sitting in order to see where Ikimaru fled to. Suddenly, half of the people laid dead on the temple floor completely covered in blood. The remaining people, who were the sacred guardian samurai, unsheathed their swords and yelled "Hemoblade!" changing the color of their katanas crimson. That's it! The sacred guardians! They must've sent one of their young apprentices to search for me. But why a blind one?
As Ikimaru was stuck on that thought he sensed an arrow flying from his right side. Instantly, he stopped the arrow with his katana.
Before he could think another thought, a silouette appeared riding on the silouette of a horse. When Ikimaru finally managed to see the face, he was in shock to see the blind lady he just fought in the morning. What was even more shocking was that in the left hand was a bow which probably shot the arrow, and the right held a katana. But instead of it being steel colored or crimson, it was a burgundy mixed with black. The lady smiled mischievously and said, "Hello again, Augustus! It's been a while since we fought."
"We fought this morning."
"......shut your mouth! Besides do you even know what I'm holding in my hand?"
"What?"
"It's my other katana which is now in the form of the Kageblade."
(A/N: Sacred guardian samurai have the power to release two forms in their katanas: Hemoblade and Kageblade. Hemoblade is a crimson blade that can draw out all the blood out of an opponents body when the blade touches his/her bare skin. Kageblade is a burgundy-black blade which, when the opponent is stabbed with it, can summon a shadow form of the opponent with the same skills, strengths, and weaknesses.)
Ikimaru's amber eyes widened in shock....even deeper shock than before. But he still kept his guard up.
When Mewa got off her horse she leaped forward extending her blade at Ikimaru. Miss! She stabbed a tree creating another tree in its shadow form. She looked up and saw Ikimaru high in the air holding Ichigo in his arm. Oh no! I forgot that the Kageblade also gives Mewa the ability to see! I better keep Ichigo in a safe place so that she won't get stabbed. He chucked her in a nearby branch as he landed toward the ground. Mewa sprinted straight toward him ready to stab his chest. Clang! Swift recover, attempts an uppercut. Clang! Another recover, and shifts back to get in a right position. Ikimaru points his blade downward as if he was ready to counter an attack. "Ackkk!!!" Ikimaru falls backwards as he closes his eyes. He didn't have enough sleep to regain his strength. Mewa walked up to Ikimaru and just looked at him in amazement.
"Wow, I thought you were much stronger than this. It's almost as if you want me to stab you." She held the hilt of her katana pointing the blade downward at Ikimaru's right hand. In an instant, she stabbed Ikimaru's hand with the Kageblade. The black on the blade started moving around taking the form of Ikimaru. Mewa started laughing an evil, yet still girly, laugh. When the shadow formation of Ikimaru was complete, Mewa retracted her blade, got onto her horse and rode down the hill. Ichigo landed on her feet and kneeled at Ikimaru's side. She held Ikimaru's stabbed hand wrapping it in bandages. "Get up!" She kicked his side, and hid behind a tree shuddering from the sight of Ikimaru's shadow form
"Oww! Okay I'm up! What happened?"
The shadow form exclaimed in a hoarse ominous voice, "Me!!"
Ikimaru looked up and saw a darker version of him. His hair was ashen, his skin was pale, his eyes were blood-shot red, his teeth were tobacco yellow, his clothes and his katana were pitch black, and mouth was foaming at a constant rate. This wasn't good.
I haven't seen the Kageblade used on me for a long time. I wonder if I'm still able to beat my shadow form.
The shadow form walked slowly up to the swordsman with a grimace on his face. He grabbed his katana and pointed only a few inches from Ikimaru's face.
Ikimaru's eyelids lowered halfway as he said, "Looks like this battle's gonna take a while." He lifted his katana pointing it the same way as his shadow was, only inches away from the face.
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:30 am

Chapter 8: Blade of Shadows vs. Blade of Light

Characters:

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God" who takes away our sins and makes a new in Him.

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian samurai who used to be a ruthless killer named "Augustus"

Ichigo Desuto: A beautiful teenager who's trying to find her father who abandoned her.

Orochi Augustus: The shadow form of Ikimaru. He has the same skills as Ikimaru before the conversion to Christianity.

2 Corinthians 5:17 - Therefore if any man [be] in Christ, [he is] a new creature: old things are passed away; behold, all things are become new.

Hours have passed since the two swordsmen have moved. Orochi was still grimacing showing his tobacco-colored teeth. Ikimaru was still half-asleep half-awake. Ichigo was still crouching behind a tree not wanting to be noticed by either of them. WHOOSH! WHOOSH! CLANG! CLANG! More CLANGS! The swordmen were moving so quickly through the air that the only thing visible from the fight is the clanging of swords. Ikimaru suddenly appears on the dirt path palm-faced then he reacts to an attack from the rear by Orochi who's still grimacing, then even more clanging.
The shadow samurai got fed up with all the clanging so he landed on the ground and lowered his katana parallel to the ground.
"Hey, let's stop our kid's play and actually fight. Starting off with this....." He swings his sword with tremendous force creating a gale of wind knocking down all the trees and lifting some dirt off the road. Ikimaru leaped toward Ichigo and protected her from the gale. Orochi sheathed his sword and yelled, "You managed to survive the Ianuarius samurai's element: Wind, but I bet you won't survive Februarius's element." The shadow positioned his sword in front of his body. Then there was tremondous pressure produced from his presence lifting chunks of earth around him. Ikimaru had to do something before Orochi could unleash the Februarius element. I need to stall this attack, but with what? Orochi yelled a battle cry almost ready to unleash the element. C'mon....C'mon! There's got to be something! Wait, there is one thing I can do........... "Alright! You're gonna die, Ikimaru!" Orochi's katana linked itself among the chunks of earth creating a massive earthblade. He grabbed it and ran straight toward Ikimaru. Okay! Here's my chance!
Suddenly, Orochi was moving slower than usual. "What's going on here?!" Ikimaru just stared off into space, his attack worked.
Ikimaru remembered a time when he was reading some of the writings in his master's library. All day he read, and learned. Nothing else he did besides that when he had spare time. Hours and hours passed as he read.
Okay, that flashback should've bought me some time.
"Hey! No flashbacks!"
Orochi continued his attack toward the samurai with even more agressiveness than before. But when he got there, Ikimaru wasn't.
"OOF!!!" He felt a forceful kick on his back making faceplant the ground. Ikimaru lowered his leg and readjusted his posture. The earthblade transformed into Orochi's pitch black katana. When he managed to lift his face full of dirt, his eyes lit on fire. He stood up, feet shoulder-width apart, both hands gripped at the hilt of the katana, and back straight. "Ikimaru Tarimi!!! You're going to regret the day you've let me loose from your body!!!"
"Which was a few hours ago....."
"......stop that!!!" The shadow's katana shimmered in the sun. His face glowing red from the anger. Ikimaru almost dozed off for a few seconds because of the shadow taking so long to just stand there. But he was still aware of what Orochi Augustus was going to do. As the shadow continued in his idleness, Ikimaru closed his eyes and prayed, "Lord, revive me. I need revival. That fire you've sparked in me. Revive it, Lord God. Please."
Orochi smirked saying, "Enough of history class, let's just finish this off with one blow." As he spoke, his katana grew in length. "The Augustus element!! Blade of Shadows!!" Just then, everything turned pitch black to the point where you can't see or hear anything. Orochi threw his katana at Ikimaru. CLINK! It bounced off of some metal object. Orochi looked up and saw shining armor in the midst of the darkness. He had to shield his eyes from the brightness in order to be able to see. Ikimaru's blade was also as bright as his armor. After he straightened his back, he walked up toward Orochi and said, "I no longer wield the blade of shadows. My blade has been changed, and you shall be the first to witness its power." And with that, Ikimaru slashed Orochi's body making it dissolve into nothingness. When Orochi's body completely disappeared, the pitch black went along with it.
"Hey Ichigo! Where are you?"
*Tap, tap* "Helloo."
"Sorry about the delay, ready to go?"
"Yup! Fortunately, there's a village below this hill."
"Cool."
Suddenly three vague figures appeared out of nowhere. "Stop right there, lady stealer!!!!!!!!!"
Ikimaru and Ichigo were caught of guard way too easily. Aw man! Not now!
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:38 am

Chapter 9: Family Feud

Characters:

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God," who is the author and finisher of our faith in Him.

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian samurai who used a renegade swordsman.

Ichigo Desuto: A beautiful teenager still searching for her father.

The Sagita brothers: Three guys totally in love with Ichigo. Their leader is the oldest brother, Goji.

Luk 10:27 He answered: " 'Love the Lord your God with all your heart and with all your soul and with all your strength and with all your mind'*; and, 'Love your neighbor as yourself.'*"

Ikimaru and Ichigo stood at the top of hill covered with grass and large intimidating trees thatspread across the countryside. From where they were standing they could see clear blue skies, a few mountains on the left, and in front of them what was supposed to be the next village the comrades were going to enter. What was blocking their view were three brothers standing in front of their path, each in a strange pose as if they were circus performers, all of them smiling in a proud manner. One on the left was standing on his left leg, pointing his right hand toward the sky, his left fist was palm down with his knuckles pointing to the right, and his right leg was hooked onto his left leg, creating what looked like a "Ta" from the Japanese hiragana. Another on the right was kneeling on one knee with his arms outstretched to the sides creating what looked like a "Sa". The one in the middle, with facial hair and bushy eyebrows showing that he was the oldest. was just standing there with his hands on is hips. If you tried doing those poses as you read, kudos to you.
Ikimaru had unsheathed his sword at the time so the brothers had no idea who he was. The elder brother stepped up in front of him looking eye-to-eye. "KIDNAPPER! HOW DARE YOU DO THAT TO SUCH A BEAUTIFUL LADY!! IF YOU HAD ANY MANNERS YOU'D KNEEL BEFORE ME, GOJI SAGITA, THE SAGITA CLAN'S DYNAMIC WARRIOR WHO CAN KILL A MAN WITHIN 30 SECONDS!!!"
Ikimaru stepped back pinching his nose, eyes watering from the stench of Goji's breath. The dynamic warrior, who mistook it as a challenge, drew his katana and extended it in front of him. "BECAUSE OF YOUR RUDE BEHAVIOR, I CHALLENGE YOU TO A FIGHT TO THE DEATH!!!" Ikimaru, after recovering from the stench, pulled out his katana and got into his fighting stance. The brothers and Ichigo were on the side wondering who'd win. One of the brothers called, "READY, BEGIN!!"
Goji ran full throttle holding his sword with two hands above his head. Ikimaru just stood there, still disoriented from the lack of sleep. "HIYA!!!!" CLANG! Goji ran around Ikimaru and swung his sword at Ikimaru's neck. CLANG! THIS GUY'S GOOD! HE BLOCKED BOTH OF MY ATTACKS! BUT HE PROBABLLY WON'T BE ABLE TO BLOCK MY FAST ATTACK. Goji jumped a few feet back and disappeared. Ikimaru stepped to the side holding his sword perpendicular to the ground. CLANG!! The dynamic warrior was in shock of what just happened. I-IMPOSSIBLE.... "Are you done yet?"
Goji just looked at the shaggy haired samurai in amazement. "H-HOW WERE YOU ABLE TO SEE MY ATTACK?"
"Here's a clue. FIREBLADE!" Ikimaru's katana turned into pure flame.
"N-NO....NO....NOOOO! IT CAN'T BE....THAT GUY ON THE WANTED SIGNS?"
"Yup, and you said this was a fight to the death?"
"P-PLEASE, HAVE MERCY!"
The other brothers grabbed their katanas and jumped at Ikimaru. But he teleported behind them right after they jumped making the brothers attack Goji. CRASH!
Ikimaru looked at the dog pile in front of him and shook his head. "You guys do realize that you're making fools of yourselves right?"
The three brothers scooted back from him. "DON'T KILL US PLEASE! OUR CLAN IS ALREADY AT WAR AND WE ARE THE ONLY WARRIORS."
"Don't worry, I'm not gonna kill you. I've changed a long time ago, so you'll be fine."
"HA! ONLY A FOOL WILL SURRENDER!! HIYA!!" Clang!
"I'm giving you mercy right now, and you're not receiving it?"
"THAT SOUNDS LIKE A SORE LOSER TALKING! FIGHT ME LIKE A MAN!" CLANG!
Ikimaru disappeared before the next swing. Goji looked around wondering where he could be. Suddenly he felt fire under his chin.
"Do you still want to fight me?"
"......FINE YOU WIN..."
Ikimaru sheathed his blade. Goji just looked at Ichigo with a puppy dog look. His eyes were full of tears.
"MY LADY! I'M SORRY, I HAVE FAILED YOU!!"
Ichigo hid behind Ikimaru. The two were about to leave when Goji yelled, "HEY! CAN YOU HELP US WITH SOMETHING?"
"What is it?"
"WELL...THE SAGITA CLAN IS AT WAR WITH THE SANYO CLAN AND THE THREE OF US ARE THE STRONGEST WARRIORS. SINCE YOU DEFEATED US, DO YOU THINK YOU CAN HELP US FIGHT THE SANYO CLAN?"
Ikimaru thought about for a while, looked around at the scenery, then he looked at Goji and nodded.

The Sagita village was pretty much a bunch of houses, stores, and farms protected by a giant fence. Ikimaru was introduced to the village elder.
"WHO IS THIS MAN IN FRONT OF ME?" the elder asked.
"IKIMARU TARIMI, A MAN WHO DEFEATED US IN A FIGHT OUTSIDE THE VILLAGE! CAN HE JOIN THE WAR?"
"SURE, NOW LEAVE ME!!"
Ikimaru was led to a room full of warrior armor and all that good stuff. He was allowed to choose any in the room, but he decided to just fight as he was. Then he was led to an open field while Ichigo stayed at the gate in view of the field. One side filled with Sagitas, the other side Sanyos. Goji whispered to him, "STAY AT THE BACK, YOU'LL BE OUR SECRET WEAPON."
Battle cries!! War starts. Sanyos vs. Sagitas and vice versa. Slashing and slicing and dicing and clangs and falling. All this went on for an hour or so when suddenly a dark figure appeared from the Sanyo side. He was wearing a giant hat, a samurai uniform, and held a long katana. The figure started moving speedily throughout the Sagitas making them fall to the ground. Goji was about to be the next kill, but his life was saved by the clang of Ikimaru's sword. Ikimaru managed to look at the mysterious figure's face. It was old, pale, black hair, and almond eyes. Ikimaru's eyes widened and yelled at the Sagitas, "GET BACK YOU GUYS, THIS IS MY FIGHT!!!"
The Sagitas retreated. The Sanyos retreated. The only ones left on the field were the mystery figure and Ikimaru. The figure took off his hat and said, "So, we meet again......."
"Yes......"
The figure lowered his head, "It looks like this'll be our last battle together......my student....."
Ichigo saw the figure's face and realized that the dark mysterious figure was her dad!!
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:38 am

Actually the title is Dynamic Family Feuds
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 24, 2009 12:40 am

Chapter 10: The final conversion

Characters:

Kami-sama: Japanese for "God", the One who gave us the Way, the Truth, and the Life.

Ikimaru Tarimi: A Christian Samurai

Ichigo Desuto: A beautiful teenage girl looking for her long-lost father

Mujin Desuto: Ichigo's father

Gasuke Kicho: The elemental giant that carries his wakizashi (a sword that comes along with the katana)

Mewa Jouzu: A blind guardian of the training temple who's obsessed with being Ikimaru's sidekick.

Mark 16: 15 - And he said unto them, Go ye into all the world, and preach thegospel to every creature.

The two samurai backed off from each other and bowed. Both of them didn't move. No sound was made or heard. Not even the birds. Suddenly, a star fell out of the sky and landed on the ground right next to them creating a titanic explosion of dirt. When everything cleared a great figure arose covered in dust and dirt. ROOOAAAAARRR!!! The two samurai looked at the figure and wondered what it was. After the figure cleaned himself a bit, Ikimaru realized that it was Gasuke the giant!
"GASUKE BACK TO CRUSH ANT!!!!"
Mujin looked at the giant and then at Ikimaru. After a few seconds of thought, Mujin pulled out his wakizashi. Gasuke pulled his out as well. Ikimaru just stood there. Again, none of them moved for a while.
Suddenly the three samurai felt a stab on their bodies. The three looked at each other wondering who did it. A few minutes later, three dark replicas of the samurai appeared. Ikimaru looked around to find the source of the stabbing. Behind Gasuke, was a girl holding a black katana. The shaggy-haired samurai ran behind Gasuke with sword in hand. CLANG!! The other samurai looked around wondering what happened. Mewa jumped back and jumped in the air. Ikimaru teleported to where Mewa was. CLANG!! Ikimaru landed in the middle of the circle of samurai who were smiling at him.
Mujin said, "Hmm, it seems as if you met these warriors before. Let's see how you do against all of us."
All six warriors thrusted their blades toward Ikimaru. MISS! Mujin jumped in the air and swung his sword in the air. CLANG!! The shadow forms of Mujin and Ikimaru also jumped in the air. CLANG! CLANG!! Ikimaru madly swung his sword around at super speed to block all the katanas thrusting at him. CLANG CLANG CLANG C CLANG CLANG C C C CLANG CLANG CLANG!! Ikimaru teleported toward the ground behind the two Gasukes, stood on his hands and kicked both of them high into the air. He jumped from the ground, bounced of the two giants, and released a gust of wind at Mujin and the two shadows. The old samurai started swinging his katana crazily. CLASH! CLANG! CLING! DING! KRING! Everyone landed on the ground.
After regaining their composure the two Mujins flew toward Ikimaru with their katanas spinning like windmills. Shadow Augustus was scared for Ikimaru and released his Shadow element on the two Mujins. But Ikimaru's armor shined brightly destroying the shadow element and the shadow forms of Mujin and Ikimaru. The original Mujin was in shock of how Ikimaru was able to defeat his own element. He disappeared.
Ikimaru looked around wondering where he could've ran off to. "AAAAHHHH!!!" Gasuke shrieked bloodily falling to the ground. Ikimaru turned around and gazed upon a dead Gasuke. "AAAAHHHHHHH!!!" A feminine shriek from Mewa. Ikimaru knew that he'd be next.
But where was Mujin? How did kill those samurai without being noticed? Why is he still hiding?
So many question raced through Ikimaru's mind. He needed to get onto higher ground. Looking around he saw a giant rock. "Oh my goodness a giant rock!" He teleported there and to his surprise he another giant, "Oh my goodness it's another giant rock! And I thought this rock was giant!" He teleported to the other giant rock and returned to his normal form looking out for Mujin. Swishing of grass. A jump. A whisper, "Goodbye, my student." Ikimaru was totally caught off guard when he saw Mujin in mid-air right behind him gripping his katana. SkreeeennnnnnKow! Ikimaru was just saved by a mysterious katana blocking Mujin's. At first, the figure in front of him was obscure, but as he smelled the air he realized who this person was.
Mujin looked up, wide eyes. The figure's katana was sheathed. Mujin landed in front of the giant rock on bended knees and head down.
Ikimaru finally managed to speak, "N-no way....since when were you......able to do that??"
The figure turned around and said with a grin, "You're not the only one who was trained by my dad."
The two of them jumped in front of Mujin. Ichigo went up to her father and asked, "Why did you leave me dad?"
The man spoke in his hands, "I....I couldn't stay around the temple knowing that I've trained a beast that would assassinate all of Japan.....so I started searching for Ikimaru in order to end this terrible threat to Japan....but what I see now is a changed man. Ikimaru, what made you change your ways?"
Ikimaru smiled and said, "Someone who loved me loved me so much that He gave His only Son to die for me so that I may be able to go to heaven and live eternally."
"How can I know this person?"
"Ask him into your heart knowing that you've been doing many things that are wrong in His eyes and that you want to be changed inside and out."
So on that day, the two Desutos became Christians and continued living there lives through faith in Christ Jesus.
The three samurai traded their katanas and wakizashis for Bibles so that they'll be better equipped to live for Jesus.

This may be the end of this story, but it's not the end of yours. Continue to grow in the Lord. Read His Word. Don't go deeply into the things of this world, and don't pretend to be spiritual when you're actually not because God knows who you really are. May God continue to bless you.
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sun Jan 25, 2009 8:38 pm

I know there's excess dialogue and not a lot of characters. Besides that, is there anything else I can work on?
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Postby mechana2015 » Sun Jan 25, 2009 11:04 pm

Paragraph Breaks. It would be a lot easier to read if there was some space within each wall of text to make it easier on the eye, rather than just separating (what I'm led to believe are) separate scenes. Also, anything else that you can think of to make the reading experience easy and accessible.

Just curious, how harsh a criticism are you looking for?
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Mon Jan 26, 2009 8:41 pm

No flaming, that's all I ask
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