Terror Virus! (the CAA manga)

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Terror Virus! (the CAA manga)

Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 17, 2006 9:28 pm

This is the result of letting a manga idea float around in my head for about a year...

setting: The near future. CAA has grown into it's own NeoToyko type town.

That's where alot of the CAA members live now.

Minimum age: 13-14? I don't knooow!

Violence: 7/10. There'll be fighting... some blood... and maybe JUST MAYBE, it'll go just a bit further.

Language: 3/10. I guess some insults will fly. No language, however.

Sexual Content: 1

Nudity (or skimpy outfits): 1

Bad Religion: 3. There's Christianity. :P

Here's page 1.

In Terror Virus, I hope to include as many CAA members as possible. Look for yourself in future pages. ^_^

I'm using this as a reason to draw, so I'll get better at it. please tell me how I can improve the art as you read this manga, and I'll try to use your advice when I can.

Thanks and, enjoy Terror Virus! More is on the way!

http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/3e5ced90b6.jpg page 1
http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/6b172bcb9e.jpg page 2
http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/3fee4b4fca.jpg page 3
http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/f5fdeab679.jpg page 4
http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/b3dd5781a7.jpg page 5
http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/1d3b42aa6c.jpg page 6
http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/ae8855f3b0.jpg page 7 NEW! :D
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 17, 2006 10:04 pm

page 2

http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/6b172bcb9e.jpg

btw, you can also tell me how I can improve the manga as a whole, if you like. not just the art. ^_^
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 17, 2006 10:13 pm

page 3

http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/3fee4b4fca.jpg
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 17, 2006 10:21 pm

page 4:

http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/f5fdeab679.jpg
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 17, 2006 11:03 pm

page 5:

http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/b3dd5781a7.jpg
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 17, 2006 11:52 pm

page 6:

http://www.myimagebuddy.com/uploads/1d3b42aa6c.jpg
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Postby rii namuras » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:06 am

(Teh awesomeness.)

(The pages are a bit big, so I have to scroll all over the place and then I have trouble remembering where I was. Scrolling up and down is okay, but side to side is just confusing.)
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:11 am

alright, I'll downsize 'em a bit.

^_^
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:13 am

Hey! Betcha can't guess who the guy in page 6 is!
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Postby Locke » Sat Feb 18, 2006 9:49 am

I'm guessing a mix between Wario and Viewtiful Joe?

Anyways awsome comic, and yes, please resize >_> We all dont have dual moniters like SOME people. *cough*Ryan*cough*
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 10:01 am

rofl, no no. It's a local CAA member.

Here's a hint. His name starts with a W.
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Postby Myoti » Sat Feb 18, 2006 11:46 am

I knows! Xp

And yeah, too big and the reading direction is flat-out confusing...
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Postby chibiphonebooth » Sat Feb 18, 2006 11:50 am

include me!!! ^^

XDDD

its really good! i like it alot. :p
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Postby uc pseudonym » Sat Feb 18, 2006 12:07 pm

My main suggestion for improvement: put all of the updated pages in one post. It will be much more organized than one per post.

Myoti wrote:and the reading direction is flat-out confusing...

Yes; a more structured system of paneling would hurt no one.
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 12:21 pm

Ok, better panelling. after page 7, I'll get on that.

And yeah, I'll put all the pages in the first post.

Now... to learn how to make better panels... hmm....
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Postby Jack Bond » Sat Feb 18, 2006 1:13 pm

The direction of reading confused me too but, I figured it out after a while.
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Postby Warrior 4 Jesus » Sat Feb 18, 2006 7:57 pm

Some of the drawings are well done, but the layout really confuses me. Remember when doing a comic to plan everything out in rough early in the game. Then it will look better and the reader won't get so confused.
Still good job for a beginner's comic (they aren't easy). You'll get there, just keep on trucking!
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Postby Scribs » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:34 pm

This is interesting. I agree with everyone elses orginization comments.

I did have a hard time figuring out who was who and what any of them were doing. I am guessing that the W guy is either W4C W4J or Wild Eagle, but beyond that I am not sure. oh, and nice use of the word Pushaw.

(it would be interesting seeing wordsworth drawn in this style...)
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Postby Warrior 4 Jesus » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:39 pm

Well if the W guy is me, then he's got me fairly similar (I have a small beard) but then I've never ridden a motorbike by myself so...
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:40 pm

nope nope. keep guessin. :P
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Postby Scribs » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:42 pm

If it isnt one of the three I mentioned, I have no clue, unless it is my brother, waffleman, but I doubt you have even heard of him.
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:43 pm

waffle....man?

nope. :)

I'm surprised. This guy's been here for as long as I can remember....
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Postby Scribs » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:44 pm

Wingzero perhaps?
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:45 pm

aaaaHAAAAAAAAA!!!

You win.

*hands Scribs a trophy*
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Postby Mave » Sun Feb 19, 2006 4:17 pm

Hey, a CAA manga using that character, Shia? ^^

Ok, my first recommendation is to shrink the pages for the ease of reading. I typically use image size of 700 x 961 dip (pixel size according to Photoshop).
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Mon Feb 20, 2006 1:58 pm

sorry, I haven't been able to update. Everytime I sit down to draw more of page 7, someone comes over, or I'm called to do something. I'll try and update some more tonight, though.
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Postby Shia Kyosuka » Fri Feb 24, 2006 8:18 am

How's this? As usual, it's read right to left.

The art is kinda bad. lol hopefully, I'll have updated more tonight.

Is it organized enough now? is the image size ok now?

Page 7 is in the first post.
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Postby Sakura15 » Sat Feb 25, 2006 6:09 pm

lol this is awesome Shia :thumb:
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Postby Mave » Sun Feb 26, 2006 6:56 am

Shia Kyosuka wrote:Is it organized enough now? is the image size ok now?


Yes, the image size is just right. XD I have to say I find your disclaimer on motorcycles pretty amusing. I'm not exactly fond of drawing anything mechanical myself.
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Postby CephasWhite » Sat Mar 04, 2006 10:00 pm

Hey Shia! These are great! :lol: Don't forget to add me okay?!
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