"Tomorrow"

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"Tomorrow"

Postby GwenneZ » Sat Dec 13, 2008 5:45 pm

I'm entering this writing contest for school and other neighboring school. The topic is "tomorrow" I'm entering a poem. This one is my first choice-well the first one that i wrote. What do you think?

Make It Different

Tomorrow
I'ts not just
The next day,
But the start of our dreams
The start of our futures.
What you make of tomorrow
Is up to you.
You choose
What tomorrow will be
Today.
Tomorrow is
Another Day
Are you going to
Make it different?
Do you want to
Make it different?
Will you
Make it different?
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The world will tell you who you are until you tell the world

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Postby GwenneZ » Sat Dec 13, 2008 6:00 pm

Okay here's my second choice- the second one I wrote. It's a Haiku.

It'll be Okay

Today Wasn't good
Tomorrow will be okay
Tomorrow is new
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The world will tell you who you are until you tell the world

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Postby GwenneZ » Sat Dec 13, 2008 6:12 pm

Here's the thrid choice.

Change

Was today
Good?
Was today
Bad?
Does that
REAlly matter?
For there's
Always tomorrow
And
Tomorrow brings
Change
No matter
If you
Want it to
Or not
It will,
It always does
And that's not
going to change
Konnichi Wa peoplez!!!

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The world will tell you who you are until you tell the world

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Postby Sae-chan » Wed Dec 17, 2008 6:36 pm

I can't say I'm much of a poem person, so my opinions are rather vague, but from what I read, I liked all of them. I liked the first and the third one - can't say much about the haiku; it seems a bit too simple (but then again, what can you get with 17 syllables?) - but between those two, I can't choose.

Sorry. ^^;;
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Postby GwenneZ » Fri Dec 19, 2008 2:42 pm

Thank you very much I chose the first one to turn in. I sure pray that ill win! i really want to. I know that I'm a good writer and really want to show it.
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Postby Sae-chan » Fri Dec 19, 2008 4:39 pm

Yep! I hope you win! (Though it's all in God's hands.) :D And keep writing!
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Postby GwenneZ » Mon Dec 22, 2008 11:53 am

I couldn't help but write lol
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Postby Ikimaru_Tarimi » Sat Jan 17, 2009 9:42 pm

Deep, very deep especially the short one
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Postby GwenneZ » Thu Jan 22, 2009 8:15 pm

thank you so much oh and btw i really like your pic
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