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My Daughter
PostPosted: Tue Mar 24, 2009 3:38 pm
by Lady Kenshin
Let me know what you think, and tell me what you figure out about the ending! It's a bit of a puzzle.
[align=center]My Daughter
“Who knows what true loneliness is - not the conventional word but the naked terror? To the lonely themselves it wears a mask. The most miserable outcast hugs some memory or some illusion.â€
PostPosted: Thu Mar 26, 2009 7:48 am
by Esoteric
Very clever misdirect. At first I thought he'd been killed while rushing to the hospital and these were the thoughts of a ghost. However, it later appears that the child (and possibly even the mother) died in childbirth. He suffered a mental breakdown and has been delusional ever since.
I especially like the descriptions in the first half, the comparisons of light/warmth and darkness.
PostPosted: Thu Mar 26, 2009 1:47 pm
by Lady Kenshin
Esoteric (post: 1301007) wrote:Very clever misdirect. At first I thought he'd been killed while rushing to the hospital and these were the thoughts of a ghost. However, it later appears that the child (and possibly even the mother) died in childbirth. He suffered a mental breakdown and has been delusional ever since.
I especially like the descriptions in the first half, the comparisons of light/warmth and darkness.
Thank you so much for reading! Actually, I was gunning for a vampire rather than a ghost, but the story works no matter what you think it is. You're correct about the delusions.
Glad you enjoyed it!