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PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 2:20 pm
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 2:37 pm
the last half of it almost flows like a song. pretty good message too.
PostPosted: Sun May 01, 2005 9:34 pm
Thank you.
PostPosted: Sat May 07, 2005 6:20 pm
TOTALLY LOVES IT! IT MOST DEFFIANETLY IS A SONG YOU LIL WRITER YOU! i looooooooooooooove its message *glomps*
PostPosted: Sat May 07, 2005 6:40 pm
Thank you. I wouldn't call me a writer, i'm not that good. And i wouldn't call me Lil cause i tower over most adults and i hate being called that. lol. j/k
PostPosted: Sun May 08, 2005 5:20 pm
Cool poem! Like Shiroi I agree that the last one sounds like a song. Hmm... I bet you could put this to music really well. In fact I would love to see that!
I really loved the line 'shout from the mountains that Jesus is Lord'. Cool imagery there; I can imagine how cool it would be to stand on top of snow-covered Everest and shout that out.
Lots of cool ideas, good lines, and I love the different lines at the end too.
Excellent writing, Soras!
I really loved the line 'shout from the mountains that Jesus is Lord'. Cool imagery there; I can imagine how cool it would be to stand on top of snow-covered Everest and shout that out.
Lots of cool ideas, good lines, and I love the different lines at the end too.
Excellent writing, Soras!
PostPosted: Sun May 08, 2005 5:29 pm
Thanky you. It's Sora^^
PostPosted: Mon May 09, 2005 7:39 am
it...it was...it was....AWESOME! 
That was beautiful. I LOVED it. And I was also just thinking that that would make a great song!! Nice nice job!
That was beautiful. I LOVED it. And I was also just thinking that that would make a great song!! Nice nice job!PostPosted: Mon May 09, 2005 11:13 am
Yes, this is a type of poem. The first part is a List poem where every line begins with the same word or words with no particular attention to rhyme or rhythm. The last part, though lyrical, still maintaims a lot of that element within the stanzas.
The last part is certaintly my favorite. It has a nicer flow than the beginning, which, even though it was a list, may have been a bit better with a more paralleled structure.
All-in-all good work, Laura! I'm proud. ^_^d This is what I'm talking about when I say practice!
The last part is certaintly my favorite. It has a nicer flow than the beginning, which, even though it was a list, may have been a bit better with a more paralleled structure.
All-in-all good work, Laura! I'm proud. ^_^d This is what I'm talking about when I say practice!
PostPosted: Thu May 12, 2005 10:56 pm
Thank you!^^ My dad said that there was some spelling earrors *or the way it was worded or somthing like that* could someone point them out to me? It would be a big help. Thanks!^^