The Desert Essa's

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The Desert Essa's

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Wed Jul 29, 2009 12:17 pm

Posting this as a seperate topic because I can and I think it needs individual attention. I wrote this stuff while I was shooting, hiking, running...alot of it, particularly the "Fields Of Golden Grass" lower down the page, are mantras I sung in my head as I marched up and down hills, fighting off exhaustion and such....so perhaps all of this has more meaning to me than anyone else. Still...



Here you go, from my heart to your eyes: The Desert Essa's.







"Night Thoughts"



So many broken parts
How many cracks make a cracked man?













"I felt you reach for me
in the stirrings of your sleep
As the shadows swayed

For a moment the door cracked open
For a moment I could see you."




:"So much dust
So much
layed down to rust
so many empty things
empty promises
How long till the water runs dry?

How long till I dream better dreams

I need sleep



I need peace.








"Sleepy leaves
fall soundlessly
In the restless breeze
of the night."
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Wed Jul 29, 2009 12:18 pm

The Desert Essa's
"Days In The Desert"







"oh, the hills of golden grass

the wind moves like fingers through a lover's hair

the sun is like a warm embrace

caressing everything








"...murky waters move so slow
down
underground
creep, sleep...Final and Deep."











Cool blue water
running over a red, red wound







Part the sea of grass
take in the stunted trees.

breathe the breeze.












"With the fall of the night
my face fell
thoughts of you
your light still burns
but not for me"






golden glow
my personal sun
affection fills my features
stone softens
in the silent conversation
I hear everything you speak




The Desert Essa's
"The Worshipful Essa's"





Heya Heya Heya
music in the tent
light from the firmament
I hear clapping in the tabernacle
heya heya heya
movment in the sound
it all flys in the air
it all comes crashing down






shhhhh....










(Today)
A stone flew from my hand
and became an inferno



a butterfly slipped from my grip
and changed into the wind



wen the time comes for me

Will I burn?




...or will I Change?"






So many shades and shapes
my heart for Yelohim
Yeshua (to Chant)

Yeshua (To Sing)

Yeshua (For everything)






Let me find
the letter of my own salvation
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Wed Jul 29, 2009 12:18 pm

Essa's From The Desert
"Essa In Exile, In Three Parts"




"Light Hill, Dark Mountain"
white grass borders black brambles
Burnt by the Sun

patterns in thse shadow
what lays unburnt
only the sickle trees swaying;
framed on the ridge by the sky.


two mounts, moving together
seperate, but one.






Weep and moan
at the ailing wall
the Wailing Wall
as every dusty, forgotten thought
falls upon you
as you mourn
me








(the description of the place)


"Old town
falling down
unwashed and unashamed
time adds no honor to your name

the wind brays, you creak and sway
broken houses in a warm wind
while all around you, covered in sleep
lay the giants of the Desert
Forgotten and Deep."
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby goldenspines » Wed Jul 29, 2009 10:01 pm

The overall tone of your poetry seems to have altered a bit with your change of environment; these have a "rough and outdoor-sy" (is that a word) feel to them which adds to the imagery of the words, I think.

To avoid boring you with a long commentary, I'll just talk about the segment of this group I liked the most.
I found "The Worshipful Essa's" the most enjoyable to read because it reminded me of sitting around a campfire, singing songs. It starts sounding rather upbeat, but then slows down into a quiet melody.


It's always nice to see your poetry, Zarn, even if we don't always comment to it. ^_^;
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Postby Ante Bellum » Wed Jul 29, 2009 10:17 pm

They've got a slow tone to them, or that is how it seems to me. They do have the aforementioned nature themes to them. They almost seem like they could be a lullaby during a rough time or a song to be sung late at night. Or even a mournful dirge.
They are well-written and...versatile, could I say? As I've said, they seem to take on different forms. Very different, a different style from a lot of conventional poetry. This I like a lot.
Overall, well done. Do you plan on anything else done in this style?
Ah yes, sorry for not being able to go into detail. They all belong to each other, it feels, so I decided to treat them all as being together instead of individual.
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